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Genre and use of conventions
Soft rock, slight narrative, 90% use of artist

Target Audience
Young adolescent (13-15)

Camera Work
Opening tracking shots, direct address camera

Editing
Slow motion, slow fades

Mise en scene
Normal everyday setting suits everyday life. Switching settings good.

Lip synching
Good (but not guitar)

Similarities & influences
The script

Original Music Video

Here is the original music video of The Remedy by Jason Mraz, it inspired us and we can reference back to it when needed.

Lyrics to the Song

I saw fireworks from the freeway
And behind closed eyes I cannot make them go away
'Cause you were born on the fourth of july, freedom ring
Now something on the surface it stings
I said something on the surface
Well it kind of makes me nervous
Who says that you deserve this
And what kind of god would serve this?
We will cure this dirty old disease
If you've got the poison I've got the remedy


The remedy is the experience.
This is a dangerous liaison
I say the comedy is that it's serious.
This is a strange enough new play on words
I say the tragedy is how you're gonna spend
The rest of your nights with the light on
So shine the light on all of your friends
When it all amounts to nothing in the end.


I won't worry my life away.

I won't worry my life away.


I heard two men talking on the radio
In a cross fire kind of reality show
Uncovering the ways to plan the next big attack
They were counting down the ways to stab
The brother in the be right back after this
The unavoidable kiss, where the minty fresh
Death breath is sure to outlast this catastrophy
Dance with me, because if you've got the poison,
I've got the remedy

The remedy is the experience.
This is a dangerous liaison
I say the comedy is that it's serious.
This is a strange enough new play on words
I say the tragedy is how you're gonna spend
The rest of your nights with the light on
So shine the light on all of your friends
When it all amounts to nothing in the end.


I won't worry my life away.

I won't worry my life away.


When I fall in love I take my time
There's no need to hurry when I'm making up my mind
You can turn off the sun but I'm still gonna shine and I'll tell you why

Because

The remedy is the experience.
This is a dangerous liaison
I say the comedy is that it's serious.
This is a strange enough new play on words
I say the tragedy is how you're gonna spend
The rest of your nights with the light on
So shine the light on all of your friends
When it all amounts to nothing in the end.

I won't worry my life away.

I won't worry my life away.

I won't and I won't and I won't

We got the lyrics off this website:
http://www.lyrics007.com/Jason%20Mraz%20Lyrics/The%20Remedy%20Lyrics.html

Pitch 1

This is not part of our proper pitch
Pretty Girl - Vincent Vincent & The Villains




Settings - The street, his bedroom, a supermarket/market square

The lyrics of the song are very narrative and we believe we could make a music video following the story behind the lyrics. For example, when it says, 'Sometimes I see her walking past my window, as i stare out vacantly.' This is a perfect opportunity to show what is happening with some effective but simple shots.

We will give the performance shots a bit of an edge, and in every performance shot, the "pretty girl" will be in the shot, looking on, without them knowing.

'I think she saw me
Whoa oh oh oh oh
well she didn’t see me at all
I went'

For this part, we will show a very amusing scene, where the main performer is getting ready to accidentally bump into the pretty girl. He is wearing a suit and has with him a rose for her. He then sees her on the other side of the street but she doesn't see him, and then a car whizzes past and covers him with water!

'Well just the other day i was buying some food at my local Tesco store,
And i turned around and saw her there walking down aisle four.'

This verse is very narrative and we can film exactly what is going on, i.e. the pretty girl in the supermarket and the main performer seeing her in aisle 4 etc.

In the first, the pair havent encountered yet, and he is just thinking about what he wants to do with her.
'Well how I wish we could meet and have something to eat,
Or maybe we can go for a dance'
we will show him sitting in his bedroom and a speech bubble will come from his head showing him doing all the things that he wants to do.


Student Videos similar to ours



We believe this is similar because like our ideas the video is very narrative.